Interesting.
I'll start by saying that the poetic part was interesting, nice to see some variation from all the pointless stick violence. Even if the actual animation itself is basically the opposite (Or, so it seems) from the message. The music was okay, it was too soft for such a rough and hard stick fight. I'd prefer that you'd use sound effects, it really touches everything up, and makes the animation more interesting. Also, lower the music, if such effects are used. The poetic part and the violent stick fight dont seem to add up, so make sure you keep at one side at a time. I can understand that the animation says "You gotta fight" but it doesnt make any sense, considering that its just 2 sticks fighting.
Anmation: 7/10
- I prefer more realistic, and more jumpy style. This looked too smooth, almost as if they "knew" what do do, it looked too soft and light. Violence needs to be harsh, cruel, shaky and jumpy, BUT realistic. So work on that.
Effects were nice, i suppose.
Art: 8/10
- It was okay, nothing particular,
Sound: 5/10
- Like i said, add sound effects, and use violent music
OR dont add sound effects, keep the animation to the subject, (poetic part) and use fitting music (which you did, but the animation doesnt fit)
Hope that will do! You have potential, style and a very characteristic view on life! With these kind of thoughts, you will reach far! Unfortunately, reality doesnt really speak in such ways, and is cruel and unfair. But i suppose hope will do.
Good luck.